A pitch is when you are selling. What you want and need is a logline.
What you have described is a concept or idea.
Your idea sentence is not even a logline.
A logline involves 3 parts to tell the story:
1. WHO - a character description that let's us know something about the lead ala "Maria, a socially awkward accountant..."
"Attractive woman" is not a character anyone cares about.
2. DILEMMA - the characters dilemma or challenge
3. ACTION - The action they take to resolve their problem.
You can describe any plot or movie with this format:
BREAKING BAD
“When Walt, a high school chemistry teacher with a wife and a handicapped son, is given a diagnosis of terminal cancer, he turns to what he knows best, chemistry, and decides to make and distribute meth in order to have something to leave his family.”
WHO – A high school chemistry teacher with a wife and handicapped son
DILEMMA – is given a diagnosis of terminal cancer
ACTION – decides to make and distribute meth GOAL – in order to have something to leave his family.
With a proper logline prepared and perfected all you should have to do is say the sentence and the response from the person "pitched" should be "I'd like to read that, send it to me".
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